This is some poetry I wrote one day. Not that long ago, and just thought I would get some feedback as to whether or not I should write more!?
You haven't seen my cry,
but once or twice.
But seeing you happy,
makes me happy times thrice.
You are the sunshine,
and the happiness.
But without you,
my world is nothing but darkness and loneliness.
I apologize for making your life so miserable.
But without you,
my life turns terrible.
Being the sweet and sensitive guy,
never felt so joyful.
Until I realized that I had no reason,
to be regretful.
So here's to you,
the love of my life.
The bringer of happiness,
the bane of strife.
-James W. Facer
So yeah! That's what I wrote!
Feedback? Comment please. (:
Okay. You want feedback? I shall give you your FEEDBACK.
ReplyDeleteI love the last four lines. I wish I could come up with lyrics that powerful, and put it to a melody.
Thank you for the reply, Rebekah. I appreciate it deeply!
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